“0 模”英语作文分析第一档( 差 ) ：(1-5 分 )

第二档( 较差 ) ：(6-10 分 )

第三档( 适当 ) ：(11-15分 )

第四档( 好 ) ：(16-20分 )

第五档( 很好 ) ；(21-25分 )

1 人 2 人 13 人 23 人 1 人

• 第五档 ( 很好 ) ； (21-25 分 )

• 　　 1. 完全完成了试题规定的任务。

• 　　 2. 覆盖所有内容要点。

• 　　 3. 应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。

• 　　 4. 语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力使用较复杂结构• 或较高级词汇所致；具备较强的语言运用能力。

• 　　 5. 有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。

• 　　 6. 完全达到了预期的写作目的。

高考作文评分标准

What kind of article can be judged ?

句式单一，书写太乱结构凌乱，字数不够

句式单一，段落层次不清

卷面不够整洁，较多语法错误

基本涵盖了主要内容，有少许拼写错误字数过多，卷面安排不合理

基本涵盖了主要内容，表达较准确层次分明，卷面安排合理

有效地使用了较多的语法结构、词汇和语句间的连接成分

层次分明，卷面整洁，表达准确

高考英语短文的结构

一、引言段（概括性阐述，主题陈述，承启语）

二、主体段

三、结尾段 概括全文的内容，使用不同的话重新阐述，

进一步强调或肯定中心思想，从而与篇首段相呼应。

主题句 扩展句结尾句｛

外在美要求 : 　　　　

1. 书写清楚，字母大小匀称；

2. 单词间距适当，没有明显修改痕迹；

3. 不能一段到底，应有合理的段落层次。

内在美要求 : 　　　　

词汇简单，句式单一，缺乏生气的文章

So boring

1. 衔接美

2. 词汇美

3. 句式美

at first, then, later, meanwhile, in the end, before long, for the first time...

1. 衔接美 : 句子间有效地使用逻辑性合理的过渡词 ; 段落间使用适当的过渡句使文章结构紧凑、自然流畅。

besides, in addition, furthermore, moreover, what's more...

however ， but ， on the contrary , yet,on the other hand ...

finally, at last, in brief, in conclusion,in a word, to sum up , all in all...

so, therefore, because of, as a result(of),due to, thanks to,owing to...

① 递进 :

③ 转折：

⑤ 总结 :

④ 因果 :

② 时间 :

2. 词汇美 : 使用生动、具体、形象的高级词汇以增加文采，避免重复使用某一单词或短语。

I like reading , my brother likes watching television.

I like reading while my brother enjoys watching television.vs↓ ↓

They hope to help those in need.

↓They hope to give a hand to those in need.

vs

A new railway is being built in my hometown.

A new railway is under construction in my hometown.vs↓

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Brainstorm So boring

I think... from my point of view...

in my opinion...

personally...

as far as I'm concerned...

Brainstorm So boring

I suggest...

It's urgent that immediate action should be taken to ...

It's time to do/that ( 虚拟 )...

I advise...

You'd better(not) do...

Brainstorm So boring

I agree...

It's more reasonable to support the view that...

I can't agree more with the idea that...

I sincerely believe that...

It's universally acknowledged that...

Brainstorm So boring

I conclude...Therefore, we'd better come to the conclusion that...

In brief / in short / in conclusion...

All in all / above all...

Taking all these factors into account,we may reasonably come to the conclusion that...

1. 随着经济的快速发展2. 引起了广泛的公众关注3. 发挥着日益重要的作用4. 正如谚语所说 5. 利远远大于弊6. 导致7. 开阔眼界8. 环保的9. 有益于10. 有害于11. 不遗余力12. 采取有效措施13. 重视14. 观点因人而异

one possible version:with the rapid development of economy

draw public attentionplay an increasingly important role in

as the proverb goesthe advantages far outweigh the disadvantages

contribute to/ give rise tobroaden one's vision/ horizon

environmentally friendly

be beneficial todo harm to

spare no effort/ make every effort to dotake effective measures to do

attach great importance to sth.

views vary from person to person

3. 句式美：以下几种手段是增加句子复杂性的常见方法，也是得高分的“亮点”。

适当正确运用（非限制性）定语，状语，名词性从句 , 分词短语，非谓语动词等较为复杂的结构

避免只使用一两个句式，要灵活运用诸如强调句、倒装句、感叹句、被动句等。

巧妙引用名人名言，谚语，俚语等

巧记口诀：强盗（倒）感叹被定上非法名称

　 My parents praised Ah Fu warmly. It had saved my little sister bravely.

强调句 My parents praised Ah Fu warmly.It was Ah Fu who had saved my little sister bra

vely.

My parents praised Ah Fu , who had saved my little sister bravely.

定语从句

　 The young man heard the bad news and couldn't help crying.

非谓语动词结构

Hearing the bad news ， the young man couldn’t help crying.

The young man couldn’t help crying when he heard the bad news.

状语从句

My father sat in the sofa. He was smoking and reading a newspaper.

非谓语动词结构 + 完全倒装

In the sofa sat my father ,smoking and reading a newspaper.

My father was smoking in the sofa with .

with 复合结构

a newspaper in his hand

1.He sat in a chair _______________________ ( 他坐在沙发上看杂

志 . ）

使用 with 或 without 引导的短语

2.He was Satisfied with the result , he decided to go on with a new experiment. 非谓

语形式

3.I have never seen such a wonderful film.部分倒装句

________________________ ， he decided to go on with a new experiment.

Exercises：

with a magazine in the hand.

Satisfied with the result

Never have I seen such a wonderful film.

4.__________________________________is known through the world. （全世界有目共睹中国近年来的成就 . ）

名词性从句

What China has achieved in recent years

名名名名名名名名名名名

1.Better be unborn than untaught , for ignorance （无知） is the root of misfortune.

2.Friends are like stars, you don't always see them, but you know they're always there.

3.The first wealth is health .

4.Living without an aim is like sailing without a compass （指南针） .

5.Where there is a will , there is a way .

6.Happiness lies not in the mere possession of money ; it lies in the joy of achievement , in the thrill of creative effort .

education

friendship

health

aim/ideal

will/struggle

happiness

Match proverbs with topics

某小学一个 63 名学生的班级中有 32 名班干部。此事经媒体报道后引发热议，观点如下 :

参考词汇：班干部 class cadre 权力崇拜 power worship

赞成：1. 多数学生有锻炼机会，组织能力普遍提高；2. 增强学生的自信心和责任感

反对：1. 导致学生对权力的崇拜；2. 浪费时间，影响学生的学习

请根据以上提示，用英语写一篇 120 词左右的短文，反映表格中的内容，并简要阐述自己的观点。

Recently there are 32 class cadres in one class of 63 students in a primary school starts a heated discussion about whether so many class cadres are needed. Some people consider itreasonale to involve more students in managing a class.It can im-prove their , it can increase students' confidence and sense of responsibility. others don't hold the same view. Class cadres are often admired by other students. power worship among students. , It also wastes students' time and affects their study. , I think it is not necessary to have so many class cadres in one class.The reason is that

it's reported that 据 报 道. It, which

观 点 因 人 而 异 . Views vary from person to person.

组 织 能 力abilities of organization. Moreover再 者While然 而

It may contribute to, possibly contributing to而 且BesidesFrom my point of view ，以 我 之 见

弊远远大于利。 the disadvantages far outweigh the advantages.