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sadmiserable

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Introduction

Is there a hook?

Is there a thesis?

An opinion? B1 idea- B2 idea- B3 idea-

Hook?

Opinion?

B1 idea?B2 idea?B3 idea?

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Do you like looking in your mirror? Low self-esteem is a significant problem at Aisha Bint Abi Baker School! People should understand this problem and apply solutions! If all schools solved this problem, it would improve the UAE and the world.

Hook Opinion B1 idea B2 idea B3 idea

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Introduction

Low self-esteem is a significant problem at Aisha Bint Abi Baker School! People should understand this problem! If all schools solved this problem, it would improve the UAE and the world.

Hook? Opinion? B1 idea? B2 idea? B3 idea?

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Do you like your reflection in the mirror? How often do you have negative thoughts about yourself? Low self-esteem is a significant problem and it affects the students at Aisha Bint Abi Baker School! People should understand this problem and apply solutions! If all schools solved this problem, it would improve the United Arab Emirates and the world.

Hook Opinion B1 idea B2 idea B3 idea

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Introduction

Do you like your reflection in the mirror? How often do you have negative thoughts about yourself? People should apply solutions! If all schools solved this problem, it would improve the United Arab Emirates and the world.

Hook? Opinion? B1 idea? B2 idea? B3 idea?

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Body Paragraphs

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Is there supporting detail? Examples? Explanation?

Is there a concluding sentence?

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People must understand self-esteem and the implications for students at Aisha Bint Abi Baker School. Many students with low self-esteem are not good at school. They might be away from school more so their grades will be bad. Some students hate themselves and the way they look. They may feel no one likes them and feel ashamed. They might have few friends and some girls might be cruel and insult them. At Aisha Bint Abi Baker School, girls with low self-esteem might not be involved in sports and other things. Most of all, how the girls feel might change their future. We need to help students with low-self esteem!

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People must understand self-esteem and the implications for students at Aisha Bint Abi Baker School. Many students with low self-esteem are not good at school. They might be away from school more so their grades will be bad. Some students hate themselves and the way they look. They may feel no one likes them and feel ashamed. They might have few friends and some girls might be cruel and insult them. At Aisha Bint Abi Baker School, girls with low self-esteem might not be involved in sports and other things. Most of all, how the girls feel might change their future.

Body Paragraph 1

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First of all, students can be friends with girls who are alone. Secondly, teachers should teach about low self-esteem. They can tell students to set high expectations for themselves and others. Teachers can reward students for good work. Then, students will become accustomed to feeling proud of themselves. Lastly, the school can put up posters about self-esteem. They can make a support place so students can talk about their problems. It is important for everyone at Aisha Bint Abi Baker School to take action to stop low self-esteem.

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Conclusion

Is there a thesis in different words than the introduction ?

An opinion? B1 idea- B2 idea- B3 idea-

Opinion?

B1 idea?B2 idea?B3 idea?

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Add details, descriptions

Remove remove word or sentences that do not make sense

Move words and sentences that fit in another spot

Substitute replace words for meaning and excitement

little boy

sadmiserable

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Capitals names, places, titles, “I”

Usage match nouns and verbs correctly

Punctuation full stops, exclamation points, commas, quotation marks,

question marks, apostrophes

Spelling All words. Use a dictionary

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Capitals names, places, titles, “I”

do you like looking in your mirror? low self-esteem is a significant problem at Aisha Bint Abi Baker School! People should understand this Problem and Apply solutions! if all schools solved this problem, It would improve the UAE and the world.

BONUS1. yesterday My dad helped me so i was Happy.

2. fatima ali and noora abdulaziz went to the mall to buy things for eid.

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Usage match nouns and verbs correctlyVT? jumps

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Do you like looking in your mirror? Low self-esteems are a significant problem at Aisha Bint Abi Baker School! Person should understand this problem and apply solutions! If all school solve this problem, it would improved the UAE and the worlds.

BONUS1. Yesterday the kid play a game and they had fun.2. The girls at school is nice because they helped me.

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Punctuation full stops, exclamation points, commas, quotation marks,

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Do you like looking in your mirror Low self-esteem is a significant problem at Aisha Bint Abi Baker School People should understand this problem and apply solutions If all schools solved this problem it would improve the UAE and the world

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Spelling All words. Use a dictionary

Due you lik looking in your mirror? Low self-esteem is a sigificant problem at Aisha Bint Abi Baker School! Peoble should understand this problem and applie solutions! If all schools solved this problem, it wood improv the UAE and the wourld.

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Peer Editing

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Steps to Peer Editing

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