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Lecture on TEM4

Note-writing

Composition

Note-writing

Grading Format Content Appropriateness

Grading

评分总体要求 １）语言没有严重错误，格式正确，内容完整，

语言得体 . 2) 便条总字数要求在 50~60 字 ( 包括三部分格

式在内 ), 不到 40 或超过 80 扣 1 分。

Format 1 ） Date （ 1 分）正确写法： Sept. 21, 2012 2 ） Salutation （ 1 分） Dear Mike, Mike, 日期

下面一行左侧。 3 ） Complimentary close （ 1 分）正确写法是

Yours sincerely, 或者 Yours, 或者 Sincerely yours,

4 ） Signature 正文下面空一到两行。 注意： 1 ）凡不符合上述正确格式或表达均要扣

分。 2 ）人名 ,*** 或汉字的扣 0.5 分。 A Sample

Content

一封理想的 TEM4便条应包括以下三点： 　　 (1)写便条的原因 ;　　 (2)要告诉的事情（适当的细节） ;　　 (3)有关的希望、建议或要求等。 A Note

Appropriateness

一般来说，便条的语言要简单明了，用词平易。当然，语言风格还应与情景一致，不同的对象，所使用的语言应有所不同。相对来说，对上级、长者、不熟悉的人的语言较为正式，对亲朋好友的语言则较为随便。不过，不管对方是谁，行文中都应体现态度诚恳礼貌。

Sample September 21, 2007 Dear John, I’m writing to tell you……

Yours, Vincent Please observe this format on the coming

TEM4.

2005 真题 You have got two tickets to a concert given by a

famous pop band/orchestra. Write a note to your friend, Hilda/Mike, describing briefly what it is and inviting her/her to come with you.

Sept. 24, 2012 Dear Mike, The National Orchestra will come to Hangzhou, and give

a wonderful performance at Huanglong Sports Center at 6 p.m. on the coming May Day. Famous musicians like Sheng Zhongguo, and Hong Yun are reported to attend the concert. I’ m lucky to get two tickets and I’d like to invite you to go. That’s a rare chance we can’t miss.

Yours, Mary 9分档

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Composition

Choosing Words Sentence Construction

Choosing Words

Choose the right word Abstract and concrete words Variety Avoid Informal Diction Avoid Sexist Language

Choose the Right Word Meaning include denotation (neutral) and

connotation (negative or favorable). Thin, skinny, slender Pushy, ambitious, bold Cheap, Weird, Politician, Pathetic,

Abstract and Concrete Words Abstract Concrete affection kiss, embrace sorrow weep, silent violence punch, shove happiness laugh, smile

1. My relative gave me two gifts. My uncle gave me a tennis racket and a fishing rod. 2. The cover of this magazine is very nice. The cover of this magazine is artistic. 3. His writing is good. His writing is clear (coherent or concise). 4. Chinese people are very good. Chinese people are very kind/generous /warm-hearted / honest / friendly / selfless/amiable. Next

On a fine afternoon in New York, I got into a taxi. From the driver’s expression and the way he slammed in his gears, I could tell that he was upset. I asked him what the trouble was. “I’ve got good reason to be sore,” he growled. “One of my fares left a wallet in my cab this morning. Nearly three hundred bucks in it. I spent more than an hour trying to trace the guy. Finally I found him at his hotel. He took the wallet without a word and glared at me as though I’d meant to steal it”

“He didn’t give you a reward?” I exclaimed. “Not a cent. But it wasn’t the dough I wanted…”

he fumbled, then exploded. “If the guy had only said something…”

How do A students like these do it? Brains aren't the only answer. The most gifted students do not necessarily perform best in exams. Knowing how to make themost of one's abilities counts for much more. Hard work isn't the whole stow either. Some of these high-achieving students actually put in fewer hours than their lower-scoring classmates. The students at the top of the class get there by mastering a few basic techniques that others can easily learn. Here, according to education experts and students themselves, are the secrets of A students. Concentrate. Top students allow no interruption of their study time. Once thebooks are open, phone calls go unanswered, TV unwatched and newspapers unread. "This doesn't mean ignoring important things in your life," Amanda explains. "It means planning your study time so that you can concentrate. If I'm worried about a sick friend, I call her before I start my homework. Then when I sit down to study, I can really focus." (Edwin Kiester & Sally Valentine Kiester)

Avoid Informal Diction Colloquial Diction 1. Don’t use contractions like I’m, what’s. 2. Clipped forms such as TV, exam and

dorm are unacceptable. 3. Dictions like kind of, sort of, nice, great

are frowned upon. 4. Slang is not preferable: something

smells fishy, cool, big shot, chick and so on.

Avoid Sexist Language Original: mankind Alternatives: humanity, people, human beings Original: businessman Alternatives: business executive, business

person Original: fireman Alternative: firefighter Original: steward and stewardess Alternative: flight attendant Original: policeman and policewoman Alternative: police officer

Sexist: Everyone should complete his task in time.

Revised: Everyone should complete Their task in time.

Sentence Construction

What is a sentence? One sentence, one idea.

Mary is a beautiful girl, and she lives in Shaoxing.

Mary, a beautiful girl, lives in Shaoxing. Run-ons: Comma splices and Fused Sentences Sentence fragments

Run-ons☆ (a big problem) A run-on is an error that occurs when two

independent clauses are joined incorrectly. Two Kinds:

A comma splice is a run-on that occurs when two independent clauses are joined by just a comma. e.g, I opened the door, he didn’t move.

A fused sentence is a run-on that occurs when two independent clauses are joined with on punctuation. e.g, I opened the door he didn’t move.

Four strategies to revise the two errors

Four strategies to revise the two errors

A period between the two. Semicolon between the two. A coordinating conjunction (and, but,

for, or, nor, so, yet: FAN BOYS ) between the two, creating a compound sentence.

Subordinate one of the two clauses, creating a complex sentence.

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