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M 5 Unit 5

First Aid

假如你是李华，刚刚作为志愿者队长接受紧急救助培训回到学校，英语老师丘老师请你为同学们做报告，分享你学到的救助知识。请用英语写一篇 120 字左右的发言稿。参考词汇： first aid

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内容包括：1. 介绍什么是紧急救助；2. 举出 2-3 个紧急情况的例子，并介绍如何实施

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3. 紧急救助在日常生活中的重要性 ;

4. 你的建议。注意： 1. 字数 120 左右。 2. 开头已写好， 不计入总词数。Dear friends, I am happy to give a talk, sharing what I learn about first aid.

• Dear friends,

I am happy to give a talk, sharing what I learnt about first aid.

First aid is the timely treatment given to the injured before doctors comes.

Students as we are, we should prepare for an emergency by learning something about first aid, which is urgently needed in some accidents. For example, if someone suffers from a sprained ankle while doing sports, the best way to treat it is to put an ice pack or cold water on his ankle.

When treating a cut, we should take immediate action to clean the wound and stop the bleeding. Call 120 if the injury is too severe to deal with.

Besides, keeping a first- aid kit handy is a wise choice.

In conclusion, knowing how to perform first aid is of great importance in our daily life, which sometimes means the difference between life and death. Only with a cool mind and adequate knowledge can we offer a helping hand when necessary.

• 1. To begin with, I want to tell you what is first aid.

• To begin with, I want to tell you what first aid is.

• 2. Only when giving first aid quickly, can we save lives in time before the ambulance comes.

• Only by giving first aid quickly can we save lives in time before the ambulance comes.

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• 3. If you can offer first aid in time, it has a great possibility that you can save a life.

• If you can offer first aid in time, there is a greater possibility that you can save a life.

• 4. Facing so many uncertain things during our daily life, getting the hang of the knowledge of first aid is very important.

• Facing so many uncertain things in our daily life, we should get the hang of adequate first aid skills, which is of great importance.

With so many uncertain things filling our daily life, we should get the hang of adequate first aid skills, which is of great importance.

• 5. It is helpful for us to learn first aid, which can help you or others out of trouble.

• It is important for us to learn first aid, which can help ourselves or others out of trouble.

• 6. When meeting someone gets a broken arm, the first thing we should do is removing dirt form wound.

• When someone gets a broken arm, the first thing we should do is to remove dirt from the wound.

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•1. Mastering the skills of first aid is becoming more and more necessary. (By Tu Dabei)

•First aid is the emergent care for an injured person before medical treatment is available. (By Zheng Qiujian)

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• 2. In minor emergencies, first aid can prevent a victim’s condition from getting worse and provide relief from pain. (By Zhong Yi)

• In the case of the serious injury, a few minutes can make the difference between complete recovery and the loss of life. (By Zhong Yi)

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• When facing the sudden illness or injury, we should calm down, basing on which first aid can be given successfully. (By Wu Yangyang)

• For example, if someone suffers from nosebleed, you should get him to sit down, tilting his head forward slightly. (By Zheng Qiujian)

• Another case is that if your skin gets burned, place the burned area under gently running water for about 10 minutes. (By Huang Quanshui)

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• 3. We also should check electrical wires a number of times a year to make sure they are in good condition. (By Li Xiaoji)

• No one can deny the fact that mastering some first aid skills can do much good to us. You can never pay too much attention to first aid as it is so important that sometimes it can even save someone’s life. (By Wu Chaochao)

• In that case, how can we attach little importance to first aid? From my judgment, we cannot close our eyes to the fact that mastering first aid is of great benefit any longer. (By Lai Mengqi)

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• Therefore, it goes without saying that it’s of great benefit to learn more knowledge of first aid and apply it to our daily life properly. (By Luo Yanlin)

• In brief, first aid can save lives to a certain extend, thus urging us to master such fundamental skills to live a more comfortable and healthier life. Only when we try out best to get the hang of more knowledge about first aid, apply it to our daily life and give our hands to those who are in need can the world be full of laughter and warmth. (By Liu Liu)

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• 2. design the way of presenting

• 3. make good use of conjunctions, advanced expressions, sentence patterns and grammar structures.

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