—— 短话长说

Teacher: LiCongfang

六安市新安中学英语组

好的书面表达的要求

１．形式上，也就是文章结构， 谴词造 句上胜人一筹２．要点全面，发挥想象自然，内容 适当拓展3 ．书写工整认真，字体漂亮，版面美观 大方，段落分布合理．

一、利用文章总体模板

1. 文章开头的总体交待

—— 引出主题

A. Recently, we had a discussion

about …

B. We carried out a survey of …

C. When it comes to the topic

whether …

如何从形式上胜人一筹？

2. 呈现不同的观点 —— 陈述观点

• A. Some of them are in favor of the idea

that… However, others hold a completely

opposite opinion.

• B. Some people firmly believe that….

Others argue that …

呈现论据时常用的连接词

• …in the first place, __( 原因一 ),

• in the second place, furthermore, ____( 原因二 ).

So it goes without saying that _____( 观点一 ).

• …Some people hold the idea that__ ( 观点一 )

• In their point of view, ___( 原因一 )

• on the one hand ，  ___ ( 原因二 )

• Therefore, there is no doubt that ___( 观点二 ). 　

3. 结尾部分表达个人观点和总结的 用语 —— 总结观点

As far as I’m concerned,…/ From my

point of view, …/ To sum up, …

方法 1. 使用从句或非谓语动词使句子高档

二 . 句式多样，文章增“靓”．

1. They arrived at the school. They felt the happy atmosphere.

When they arrived at the school, they felt the happy atmosphere.

Arriving at the school, they felt the happy atmosphere.

Rewrite the sentences

3. He wants to improve his English. He studies

hard.

Given another chance, I will succeed.

In order to improve his English, he studies hard.

If I am given another chance, I will succeed.

2. I will be given another chance. I will succeed.

方法 2. 巧用倒装 , 强调结构增强句子的表现力

1. He didn’t realize his foolishness until he returned home.

Not until

2.We can save the earth by changing the way we live.

Only

Complete the sentences

he returned home did he realize his foolishness.

by changing the way we live can we save the earth.

• 3.He is clever but he does not work hard.• as/though• 4. The clock tower stands on the other side of

the street.• On the other side of the street

Clever he is, he does not work hard.

stands the clock tower.

方法 3. 尝试多样化表达方式 ( 句式变化 ,词性变化 )

In recent years, Beijing has been advancing very fast.

All these make people’s lives convenient, pleasant and

colorful.

_____________________________________________ which_____________________________________

In recent years, Beijing has been advancing very fast,

makes people’s lives convenient, pleasant…

Beijing, people’s lives are becoming more and more convenient, pleasant and colorful.

With the development of

________________________________________

________________________________

____________________________so ___ __Nowadays, Beijing is developing fast that

people’s lives are getting more convenient,

pleasant and colorful

句式多样

文章增“靓”

1. 使用从句或非谓语动词使　　　　　　句子高档

2. 巧用倒装增强句子表现力

3. 尝试多样化表达方式

三 . 善用高级词汇

Which is better? 1 周末我们会有很多作业要做 .

A .We have endless homework to do at the weekend.

B. We have a lot of homework to do at the weekend . 2 在我所有的老师里 , 毛老师给我留下了很深的印象 .

A. Of all my teachers, I still remember Mr Moore.

B. Of all my teachers, Mr Moore gave me the deepest impression.

3 高级培训班结束后回到家，他的妻子感到精疲力尽。A. His wife came back home after the advanced training class, feeling very tired.

B. His wife came back home after the advanced training class, feeling very exhausted. 4. 他没听我课上讲的东西。A ． He turned a deaf ear to what I said in the class.

B ． He didn’t listen to what I said in the class.

• 如何从形式上胜人一筹？

一、利用文章总体模板

二、句式多样，文章增“靓”．

三、善用高级词汇

如何在内容上言之有物？

方法—添加与所给信息有关的前因后果及条件，目的等内容１、附加成分作解释说明

例一：这样更方便照顾父母。拓展：因为父母越来越年迈。 原因

as they are getting older and older.

例二：因广告过多， 影片放映晚点 。拓展：这导致观众不耐烦甚至恼火 。 后果

which made audience impatient and some of them even annoyed.

making audience impatient and some of them even annoyed.

It will be much more convenient to look after your parents

There were so many advertisements that they delayed the time of showing the film,

条件

例三：安全出口（ exit ）标志不明， 存在安全隐患 (potential hazard ）。

拓展：万一遇到危险， 观众难以逃脱。

In case of danger, it is difficult for the audience to escape.

The exit is not clear, so there will be potential hazard.

(1) 表达不同原因的概括语There are several reasons for this.The reasons are as follows.The reason for…is that…The reason why… is that

(2) 表示无需说明的事实的概括语：It goes without saying that…It’s needless to say that…Needless to say,… It’s obvious that…

２．加谚语 (Proverb)

我们应该集中注意力于学习We should focus our mind on our studies.

As the saying goes, “ 　　　　　　　　　 .” We should focus our mind on our studies...

怎么添加谚语？方法—添加与所给信息有关的前因后果及条件，目的等内容

No pains,no gains

1. 要准确 ; 2. 要为人熟知 .

２ . 加谚语 (Proverb)

锻炼对学生有好处

It is good for us students to take exercise..

As the saying goes, “All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy.” It is good for us students to take exercise.

2. 添加谚语。

常用谚语 (Proverb)Strike the iron while it is hot.趁热打铁。Think twice before you do.三思而后行。Practice makes perfect.熟能生巧。A bird in the hand is worth two in the bush.一鸟在手胜过双鸟在林。When in Roman,do as the Romans do.入乡随俗。 Do it now.机不可失，时不再来。Failure is the mother of success.失败是成功之母。 It is no use crying over spilt milk.覆水难收。 An apple a day keeps the doctor away.一天一个苹果， 医生远离我。All roads lead to Rome.

条条大路通罗马。

青少年应该做诚实守信，负责任的人

We teenagers should be honest and resposible.

For example, we can never tell lies or cheat in exams. Also , we should know the value of time. So we should be devoted to our study to take responsi-bility for our future.

３ . 举例说明

让我们做高素质的青年—诚信，负责。

Therefore, we should grow to be youth with high qualities –honesty and responsibility.

As middle school students, we all want to have a bright future. Honesty and responsibi-lity are the very high qualities we should have in order to live our dream. Do remember: Whatever happens or what difficulty you may meet ,you should always bear in mind that you are to be honest and responsible.

４ . 结尾提出倡议或号召

“短话长说”方法：

如何在内容上言之有物？

１ . 附加成分作解释说明

２ . 加谚语 (Proverb)

３ . 举例说明

４ . 结尾提出倡议或号召

How to beautify your writing ?

• Lengthen your sentences to enrich your content.

• 形式上 :1. 利用文章总体模板• 2. 句式多样 , 文章增靓• 3. 善用高级表达

• 内容上 :1. 附加成分作解释说明 • 2. 加谚语• 3.举例说明• 4. 结尾提出倡议或号召

Friday, October 15, 2010

• 分析欣赏下面一篇学生习作：

• Recently, our class held a discussion

about “Honesty and Responsibility”.

Now, I’d like to give a summary of the

discussion.

• Most of the students have come to the condusion that

honesty and responsibility, Chinese traditional

virtues, are always regarded as life-long faith. Another

view, honesty ismore a kind of inner responsibility

than a kind of outer requirement as nobody will be

pure when related to a certain intention. In other

words, one shouldn’t perform honesty just for others’

recognition.

• As far as I’m concerned, a responsible man is

always an honest man. That’s to say, a

responsible man will always face the fact and

answer for any mistake he has made but

never tries to escape from them with lame

excuses.