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--The ways to improve your writing

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activities subjectsclassmates teachers …

busy/interesting/wonderful/colorful/fantastic…boring/terrible/so-so…

Talk about your school lifePair work:

What do you usually do…?

What do you think of…?

What/Who is your favorite…?

How are you getting on with…?

Do you…?

…

扩写练习：

likes playing sports

healthy

healthy

He is a boy.

He is a ____________ boy.

He is a __________ boy who___________________.

I like music.

I like________ music.

I like________ music that____________________.

dance

dance can make me excited

仿写练习：

目的原因

She always______________________ to _______________ because___________________.

relaxlistens to some musicmusic is fantastic

relax

study better

get some knowledge

keep healthy

have a rest

have fun

get good grades

…

Miss Cool Mr. Ball

仿写练习：

It is _____________for____ to ________________________.necessary him

easy/exciting/interesting/dangerous/difficult/ wonderful/scaring/strange/possible/impossible/unbelievable/unexpected…

It is ___________ for children to play in the street.

read books

dangerous

I always____________ to _______________ because___________________.

It is _________ for____ to __________________.

who/ that 引导的定语从句。

Use these sentence patterns( 句型 ) to describe your school life.

Group work:

activities subjectsclassmates teachers …

I am going to have a trip to the West Lake with my friend. I will do some studies to improve my math because I am a little weak in it. It is necessary for me to do some housework, such as cooking breakfast and cleaning rooms.

找出用所学句型写的好句。

Choose good words and sentences to improve your writing

strategy

Compare: B is better than A in

How glad I am! I can do many things of my own. I am going to have a trip to the West Lake with my friend. I will also do some studies to improve my math because I am a little weak in it. Of course it is necessary for me to do some housework, such as cooking breakfast and cleaning rooms. Isn’t my plan nice?

beginningkey sentencelinking words 连词

ending

I am going to have a trip to the West Lake with my friend. I will do some studies to improve my math because I am a little weak in it. It is necessary for me to do some housework, such as cooking breakfast and cleaning rooms.

fluency 流畅 consecution 条理

1 ）表示并列关系的：

and,also, as well as, or…

2 ）表示转折关系的：

but, yet, however…

3 ）表示时间关系的： when, while, after, before,

then, after that…

4 ）表示因果关系的：

so, therefore ,as a result…

5 ）表示目的的：

in order to, in order that , so as to, so that…

6 ）表示列举的：

for example , for instance ,such as…

7 ）表示总结性的：

in general, in all, in a word,in short, generally speaking…

My hobbies ( Beginning ): ___________________________________. ( Key sentence A):______________________. I often read in my free time. I read many kinds of books. And I like the stories that have good endings. (Key sentence B ): ______________________. I like all kinds of music. I often listen to the music programs on radio. Although I can’t sing English songs well, I like them a lot. (Key sentence C ): _____________________.I often play ping-pong after classes. When I am doing sports, I forget all my trouble and worry. Of course it is necessary for students to play sports. (Ending) _______________________________________.

Can you add a beginning, two other key sentences, some linking words and an ending?

Practice:

I am a lover of reading

Title:____________

to

to

general 总

specific 分

specific 分

general 总

I have a lot of hobbies and enjoy doing many things in my free time.

I am a lover of reading.

I am also a music lover.

I like sports as well.

In short, I enjoy my life in school. Reading books, listening to music and doing sports are very helpful to my health and my studies.

My hobbies

Beginning:

Key sentence B:

Key sentence A:

Ending:

Main part( 正文 ): Key sentence C:

(linking words)

Make an outline for the following composition:

三年的初中生活马上就要结束了，让我们记下其中的点点滴滴。题目自拟 (100 词左右 ) （ 2010 年复习导引 P124)

Title: _____________ Beginning:

Key sentence B: …

Key sentence A:

Ending:

Main part( 正文 ):

Use outline 提纲 to improve your writing

strategyoutline 提纲

Title: _____________ Beginning:

Key sentence 2: …

Key sentence 1:

Ending:

Main part( 正文 ):

According to your own outline ,use some good words and sentences to finish your composition.

Writing

I always…to… because…

It is … for… to …

who/ that 引导的定语从句。

评价 : 请对照下面这个表格评价同桌的作文。1. fluency 流畅 consecution 条理 : (Yes or No) Beginning ( ) key sentences( ) linking words( ) ending ( )

2. Choice of words and sentences:

The number of spelling mistakes ( )

The number of grammar mistakes ( )

Does he write good words or sentences? ( )

3.Others:_____________________________

A ( 13-15 分 ) : 包含内容要点，语言基本无误，行文连贯，表达清楚．

B ( 11-12 分 ) : 基本包含内容要点，语言有少量错误，行文基本连贯，表达基本清楚．

C ( 8-10 分 ) : 内容包含部分要点，语言虽有较多错误，尚能达意．

D (6-7 分 ) : 要点不明确，语言错误多，影响意思表达． E (3-5 ) : 只抄了提示词，错误百出，不知所云． F ( 0-2 分 ) : 白卷或文不对题．

作者： ________ 　　得分： ________ 评价人 :_________

How to improve your writing

Tips :

1.Make an outline.

2.Choose good words and sentences.

3.Use linking words.

Homework: 我市英语教学网开设了“中学生论坛”，

请你结合自己的初中生活和真实感受，以A good teacher in my eyes 为题写一篇 100 词左右的短文。

(You should make an outline first)