Composition(Ⅱ)

----ZhangYan

高考作文类型：

A. 数据说明类文章B. 提示议论文类文章C. 看图说话类文章

影响高考英语书面表达得分的几个因素1. 语篇信息是否完整

2. 行文是否连贯流畅，语言是否得体。

3. 是否使用高级词汇

4. 是否使用复杂句

5 . 卷面整洁 , 书写工整

1.Can you list the outline of the writing?

2. Could you find out the transition sentence （过渡句） of each paragraph?

3. What words are used to connect each supporting idea successfully?

现在正是春暖花开的春游时节。你校学生以“高三学生要不要参加春游活动”展开了讨论。请根据以下讨论结果，以　“ whether or not should Senior 3 students go spring outing ？”为题，写一篇短文。

６５％的学生认为 ３５％的学生认为

１．应该春游 １．不应该春游

２．接触大自然，呼吸新鲜空气，有利健康

２．高考临近，没有心情玩

３．活动是精神放松，大脑休息，有利于学习

３．春游耽误学习

Whether or not should Senior 3 students go spring outing? We have had a heated discussion. Opinions are divided on the question. 　 Most students, about 65%, are for the idea that Senior 3 students should go spring outing. They think it good for their health to be close to nature and breathe some fresh air and what’s more, they can relax themselves for a while and rest their brains so that they will be more energetic. They think it will do good to their students. On the other hand, about 35% students are against the idea. They say that with college entrance examination drawing near, they don’t feel like going anywhere. Besides, they think going spring outing will take at least a day off. They can’t afford the time. They think they should fix their attention on their studies

2006 浙江卷高考作文：　　当前不少文学作品被改编成电影．有人选择看电影，有人则喜欢读原著。请你以“ Film or book, which do you prefer?” 为题，按照下列要点写一篇英语短文：

１．看电影：省时、有趣、易懂

２．读原著；细节更多、语言优美

３．我的看法及理由

　 Film or book, which do you prefer? Some of us think that it is better to see the film than to read the book in the original. The reason is that it takes less time to understand the whole story. Besides, the film is usually more interesting, and it is easier to follow. Some others have just the opposite opinion. They think that they can get more detailed information from the original. Meanwhile, the language in the book is possibly more lively and beautiful. Personally, I agree with the second view. Actually I have more reasons for it. I think I can stay at home, reading quietly in a situation of my own, and what’s more, I am able to better understand the author’s ideas. In a word, to read the original work is better than to see the film based on it.

Introduction (topic)

Body

(supporting ideas)

Conclusion

The outline of the writing:

Conclusion paragraph: …

Introduction paragraph: …

Point 2…Body

Point 1…supporting idea 1

supporting idea 2

supporting idea 1

supporting idea 2

Whether or not should Senior 3 students go spring outing? We have had a heated discussion. Opinions are divided on the question.

　 Most students, about 65%, are for the idea that Senior 3 students should go spring outing. They think it good for their health to be close to nature and breathe some fresh air and what’s more, they can relax themselves for a while and rest their brains so that they will be more energetic. They think it will do good to their students.

On the other hand, about 35% students are against the idea. They say that with college entrance examination drawing near, they don’t feel like going anywhere. Besides, they think going spring outing will take at least a day off. They can’t afford the time. They think they should fix their attention on their studies.

Opinions are divided on the question.

Most students, about 65%, are for the idea that

On the other hand, about 35% students areagainst the idea.

　　　　 Film or book, which do you prefer?

Some of us think that it is better to see the film than to read the book in the original. The reason is that it takes less time to understand the whole story. Besides, the film is usually more interesting, and it is easier to follow.

Some others have just the opposite opinion. They think that they can get more detailed information from the original. Meanwhile, the language in the book is possibly more lively and beautiful.

Personally, I agree with the second view. Actually I have more reasons for it. I think I can stay at home, reading quietly in a situation of my own, and what’s more, I am able to better understand the author’s ideas. In a word, to read the original work is better than to see the film based on it.

Some of us think that

Some others have just the opposite opinion.

Personally, I agree with the second view.

表示观点对比类写作套语A. 总起 : Opinions are divided on this question. Different people hold different / opposite opinions. People have taken/adopted different attitudes towards

… People have different opinions on this problem. People take different views on this question.B. 表达观点一 : …of them hold the opinion that …. …of them are in favor of the idea that… People who are for the idea think …

C. 表达不同观点之间的衔接 : However, …of them hold a different view. / …of them hold the opposit

e opinion. People who are against it don’t think so. However, every coin has two sides. Different from those…., …people think …. On the other hand, … people think ….

D. 结尾常用套语 : In my opinion/Personally, … As far as I’m concerned, …In short/ in brief/ in a word, …

Whether or not should Senior 3 students go spring outing? We have had a heated discussion. Opinions are divided on the question.

　 Most students, about 65%, are for the idea that Senior 3 students should go spring outing. They think it good for their health to be close to nature and breathe some fresh air and what’s more, they can relax themselves for a while and rest their brains so that they will be more energetic. They think it will do good to their students.

On the other hand, about 35% students are against the idea. They say that with college entrance examination drawing near, they don’t feel like going anywhere. Besides, they think going spring outing will take at least a day off. They can’t afford the time. They think they should fix their attention on their studies.

Opinions are divided on the question.

Most students, about 65%, are for the idea that

On the other hand, about 35% students areagainst the idea.

what’s more,

Besides

　　　　 Film or book, which do you prefer?

Some of us think that it is better to see the film than to read the book in the original. The reason is that it takes less time to understand the whole story. Besides, the film is usually more interesting, and it is easier to follow.

Some others have just the opposite opinion. They think that they can get more detailed information from the original. Meanwhile, the language in the book is possibly more lively and beautiful.

Personally, I agree with the second view. Actually I have more reasons for it. I think I can stay at home, reading quietly in a situation of my own, and what’s more, I am able to better understand the author’s ideas. In a word, to read the original work is better than to see the film based on it.

Some of us think that

Some others have just the opposite opinion.

Personally, I agree with the second view.

Besides,

Meanwhile,

what’smore,In a word

表列举说明的关联词 :• Firstly/ First of all/ To begin with, .... Secondly… Third

ly…• In the first place… In the second place…

In the third place…• Finally/ Last but not least/, ....

表示递进、强调的关联词• .... Besides/Apart from/ What’s more/ In addition/ Furt

hermore/ Moreover/worse still/ to make matters worse…

　A 、运用高级词汇或短语B 、增加形容词或副词C 、灵活运用各种句型 　

亮点点拨

B. 增加形容词或副词

在我们的校园里有一个小池塘。

There is a lovely pond in our beautiful campus.

C. 灵活运用各种句型1. 活用 it 句型It 常用句型：It is the first/ second…time that…It is (high) time that… It is said/ reported/ well-known that…It takes sb.some time to do sth. sb. feel/ find/ make/ think/ consider it +adj.+ to do When it comes to sth.

我们到了采取措施保护环境的时候．

我认为举行英语比赛很有意义．

２ . 从句

李宇春在超级女生比赛中获得第一，这令她的歌迷们很兴奋．

Li Yuchun won the first in the Super Girl Competition, which made her fans excited.

３ . 倒装句型

我们只有通过努力才能获得成功．

Only by working hard can we achieve success.

４ . 强调句型

是超级女生比赛让女孩们获得了自信。

It is the Super Girl Competition that makes girls gain confidence.

５ . with 结构

有那么多的人支持超女比赛，这个活动很成功。

With so many people supporting the Super Girl Competition, it enjoyed a great success.

近来湖南卫视策划的“超级女生”节目热播，在很多观众特别是中学生中引起了很大的凡响，现在你班为此展开了一场讨论，把讨论的结果写成一篇文章．

观点支持者 1.给一些爱唱歌的女孩提供了一个展示才华

的舞台2. 获得更多的自信3.培养了她们的竞争意识

反对者 1. 花费了太多的时间和精力2. 不能集中精力学习3. 让人觉得不通过努力就可以成功

你的观点 ……

写作基本步骤：1．仔细审题，把握要点。

２．围绕要点，写出句子。

３．添加过度，确保连贯。

４．先求正确，再求灵活。

５．认真眷写，卷面整洁。

Homework:

Finish and improve your composition and hand it in tomorrow.

你校部分学生进行了一场有关学生可否带手机进校园的讨论，请你根据下表中的提示写一篇短文，介绍讨论的情况。

一些同学认为 另一些同学认为１ . 带手机便于与同学联系２．便于与家人联系３．是一种娱乐方式

１．破坏学习气氛２．浪费过多时间和金钱３．考试时会发短信作弊

Homework:

Recently many people especially high school students have been fascinated by a singing competition “Super Girl’s Voice”, which is held by Hunan TV Station. Last weekend the students in our class had a heated discussion about it.

Some students supporting it think highly of the competition. They think it has offered a wonderful stage to ordinary but well-singing girls to show their singing talents in public, and encourages people to pursue their dreams. And this can help them gain more confidence than ever. What’s more, they can also develop their sense of competing during competition.

On the other hand, the others don’t agree with them. They think a series of competitions costs lots of time and money. As most of girls are still students who should concentrate on their study at present, taking part in it is not good for their further progress. Besides, some young people may wrongly feel that success comes from luck but not hard work.

In my opinion, it is just a successful program, which has attracted lots of audience’s attention. But seeing a bunch of girls with passion to realize their dreams in the competition, we are inspired to study harder to be super girls too, just as competitors.

６ . 分词短语

30%同学不赞同这一看法， 认为孩子不应当…。

30% of my classmates disagree with it, saying children shouldn’t….

知道了这点，他们会越来越努力学习。

Knowing this, they’ll study harder and harder.

The students of our school had a discussion about whether middle school students can go to school with mobile phones. Different people hold different opinions.

Some students think that students have mobile phones at school,because mobile phones will enable students to stay in touch with their friends and family wherever they are.Besides, the mobile phone is a way to have fun.

As a coin has two sides, the mobile phones,while providing convenience,cause trouble too. In classrooms,the untimely ringing of phones interrupts lectures and destroys the atmosphere of study.And some students may spend too much time and money on phone calls and sending messages.What’s worse, sometimes students might use phone messages to cheat during exams.

A. 高级词汇和短语举例 :challenging

available

significant

take advantage of / make full use of / make the most of

make for

contribute to

in favor of

enjoy …to the fullest

Whether or not should Senior 3 students go spring outing? We have had a heated discussion. Opinions are divided on the question.

　 Most students, about 65%, are for the idea that Senior 3 students should go spring outing. They think it good for their health to be close to nature and breathe some fresh air and what’s more, they can relax themselves for a while and rest their brains so that they will be more energetic. They think it will do good to their students.

On the other hand, about 35% students are against the idea. They say that with college entrance examination drawing near, they don’t feel like going anywhere. Besides, they think going spring outing will take at least a day off. They can’t afford the time. They think they should fix their attention on their studies.

be close to

energetic

feellike going

afford fix theirattention on

drawing near

Whether or not should Senior 3 students go spring outing? We have had a heated discussion. Opinions are divided on the question.

　 Most students, about 65%, are for the idea that Senior 3 students should go spring outing. They think it good for their health to be close to nature and breathe some fresh air and what’s more, they can relax themselves for a while and rest their brains so that they will be more energetic. They think it will do good to their students.

On the other hand, about 35% students are against the idea. They say that with college entrance examination drawing near, they don’t feel like going anywhere. Besides, they think going spring outing will take at least a day off. They can’t afford the time. They think they should fix their attention on their studies.

be close to

energetic

feellike going

afford fix theirattention on

heated

fresh

Whether or not should Senior 3 students go spring outing? We have had a heated discussion. Opinions are divided on the question.

　 Most students, about 65%, are for the idea that Senior 3 students should go spring outing. They think it good for their health to be close to nature and breathe some fresh air and what’s more, they can relax themselves for a while and rest their brains so that they will be more energetic. They think it will do good to their students.

On the other hand, about 35% students are against the idea. They say that with college entrance examination drawing near, they don’t feel like going anywhere. Besides, they think going spring outing will take at least a day off. They can’t afford the time. They think they should fix their attention on their studies.

be close to

energetic

feellike going

afford fix theirattention on

heated

fresh

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